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That was a very pleasant read. I really like how all your characters ring true, even though you vary the situations they are put through (which is another very good point). Flannery... is as good as ever (I would have enjoyed another "fist of justice", but, alas, that would have been very un-Ambassador-like), while Fern's ambivalence is very well conveyed. I am curious about how you'll make the next episodes look like. At least, there is little doubt that Flannery's previous experiences in fighting terrorist organizations will definitely help!
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So that's an affine cipher on Pokedex order and move codes as well? I'm curious, is it actually sufficiently random? Also, did you remember to ban modifier values that aren't coprime to the total number of Pokemon or moves?
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I really don't know if anyone reads this, but I guess I'll still post the chapters anyway. As again, any feedback or comment (even on significantly older chapters if you don't want to read it all in one go) is appreciated. So... as suggested by the status update, I've finally finished my first version of part 1, with 27 chapters. It ends more or less after Corey's Gym. What I am realizing is that this story is becoming, um, huge. I can't give a precise estimate, but it's topping 100 pages without question, maybe in the 130s or even more. So, when you write something this lud
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These are rather villainous, no? Take away a Pokemon's free will and such? Although, it would solve the level cap issues.
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The issue when you plan climactic endings to your story arcs is that they often end up way longer than you would like. The end of Part 1 may well take some 30 pages...
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Oops. Looks like there's going to be one OC death upcoming. Or maybe Jasmin feels "cruel mercy" instead. Jasmin is pretty bad in this episode. To all her drawbacks (especially being opposed to the protagonist, that hardly ever serves a character), you added some portion of sadism, a tendancy to gossip about state secrets to about anyone (Aladdin wasn't a police officer, was he?), a cutthroat vision of the world and a very shady moral compass. Very nice chapter, I like different viewpoints!
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Wish carefully... I'm not sure you realize just how gruesome it would get. In soft mode, you would unleash two armies' worth of Siriii (plural of Reborn Sirius?) on one another.
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Okay, thank you for clarifying the timeline. I don't know why I thought Aladdin had joined the group in earnest before betraying -- maybe I read too many stories where this was the case and automatically made the assumption. Thank you also for clarifying Jasmin and Aladdin's status. But now Vanilla remains a threat to them and Everland, as she can simply expose them and watch as an international incident unravels (that would mean chancing that Reborn doesn't end up on her side, which might be risky). You haven't specified the relative strengths of Everland and Reborn: can Everland succe
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That was dramatic, and quite emotional (maybe check the italics in the middle, I think there's a line which isn't a part of the diary). And a bit chilling from Vanilla's part. She had to look cool and in control of herself, but still. Aladdin's behavior isn't shining either: getting Vanilla to kill him would probably do her more harm than good. BTW, did you/Vanilla mention at some point why Aladdin joined that Defiance group? It doesn't seem like he joined it solely to destroy it, from the conversations (yes, I read the two links, though not their dependencies).
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The scene is rather emotional (or Gardevoir is) but it was lost on me. I don’t really buy the “I did it because at last someone cared about me” story. The timeline is anything but clear, but that story doesn’t account for Gardevoir engineering Anathea’s “accident” (at that point, Vitus doesn’t look like he was behind it) However, one can’t deny that Gardevoir was one of the good guys in the story and deserved more appreciation and sympathy upon her demise. For instance, she raised the world’s average level of intelligence and honesty by removing the police
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Favorite Pokemon of each generation?
Mindlack replied to ThatGuyOverThere's topic in Pokémon Fan Club
Ugh, so much choice. Gen 1: Vaporeon (Gengar, Jolteon) Gen 2: Heracross (Azumarill, Skymory) Gen 3: Breloom (Armaldo, Milotic) Gen 4: Lucario (Garchomp, Gallade) Gen 5: Volcarona (Scrafty, Krookodile) Gen 6: Greninja (Florges, Meowstick) Gen 7: Ribombee (Primarina, Magearna) Gen 8: I haven’t had a look at them. -
It's time for a new chapter! As advertised, we get a bit of action in this chapter. Will Gabriel manage to defeat the Jasper PULSE? Or maybe find an unexpected way out of the situation? Also, I can't help but notice that the view counter keeps going up but nobody actually commented since about ten chapters ago. I'm assuming that some people go on reading but maybe there isn't any? Did I say/write the wrong thing somewhere? Is my protagonist boring, too unrelatable or too repetitive? Is the text too lengthy or too predictable? Is my English some Frankenstein-like linguis
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What do you think would be more interesting?
Mindlack replied to Lexi Starr's topic in Creative Works
If you want to keep it light (there are plenty of reasons to make the inside dark), I have a few ideas: "And another thing" / "Mostly Harmless" "If Voldemort played Reborn" "When Gandalf met Meteors" "Life in Loopyland" "Fail better next time" / "Striving to fail better" "The All-you-can-try Life." "You only die so many times." "The fair fare for failing" / "That price isn't right" I'm not sure how you feel about any of them (I'm very bad with titles), but I hope at least you have fun reading them. -
I had never considered it, but I have to admit it might make sense. If it is the case, though, we are probably going to get a gruesome death (or fate worse than death or whatever) related to the discovery. Perhaps Fern will get killed, perhaps Florinia (because he cares for her in his own way), perhaps Aya (easiest because a hostage), perhaps someone else. But it would be very unlike this game to let Fern pull that off without any of the “good guys” dying.
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Indeed, for that instance (that in the linked video of Andracass) of the Devon Square Puzzle, there is a shorter (18-move) solution: First we start with the first square which is 629 134 578 Column 3 Down #make the W-E and NW-SE sums correct Line 3 Right Column 2 Up Line 3 Left #we permute the 2,3,5 so that we get a magic square Now the left square is good: 638 159 274 Now onto the right square, which is originally 475 829 316 First step is doing: Column 5 Up
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It's been a while since my last full playthrough, and I remember surprisingly few hard battles overall. I assume the sheer number of defeats drowned out the victories in my mind. Some of them, however, remain egregious, but they remained so only mostly because of sole-purpose mons (or stupid strategies such as collapsing the field on Luna's ace). So I can't recall when, or how, a long-standing member of my team singificantly contributed to a win. Examples include how I used a (surprise, that's so original) Prankster Murkrow to disable most of single-Pokemon boss fights, how a Kli
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I'm not too fond of doctoring screenshots for story purposes.
I like it even less when it's noticeably clumsy and I know I can't do any better.
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Time for the next chapter! This is definitely not at all clickbait, but there is still a bonus chapter (maybe a slight anticipation of what's in store for Gabriel, maybe somebody else's viewpoint) if someone solves the math problem in chapter 16. Or, you know, you could just wait and I'll probably post one anyway. To be honest, that chapter is a bit of a short-ish filler. In my current outline, the action happens mostly in chapters 20 and 21, there's a slight pause, then the climax of the Beryl Arc (and Part 1) is set for chapters 24, 25, and 26. That's not set in stone though.
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I'm not too sure about other people, so I'll attempt to list all the reasons why I might dislike him. Then I'll give the reason why I do hate him. Up to the end of E17, his main (only?) appearances (in the ruins and in the cult sanctuary) are huge dei ex machina where the PC did all the work, got stalemated, and he and Gossip Gardevoir save the day without a sweat (and conveniently at the last minute). He's a very eccentric character living in a luxurious castle -- where exactly did he get the money, as a chess grandmaster doesn't have a grand salary -- and his support of t
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Lin may well die in E19, but I'm afraid of it happening. So far there hasn't been a death without some variety of tearful backstory linked, and they would have to amp that a bit (it's more or less the big bad, and it's the endgame). If we're really unlucky, she'll turn out to have been forced, as a child, to burn kittens alive until it went all out of control one day, her parents got burnt and her brain damaged. Actually, there are other characters in the game (such as Bennett and Radomus) that deserve, in my opinion, a slow and excruciating death for their heinous actions. The tr
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The issue with Team Meteor is that the “current leadership” is pretty much made up with omnicidal maniacs (warning: do not look it up on tvtropes) who want to rewrite reality. I don’t think you can expect such people to actually keep their part in any deal. But even in the “old leadership”, the goal of “trap people and let them rot and starve to death” (when the actual objective is “simply” to drive them out) does not inspire me a lot of trust. So basically, I cannot see any reason to wilfully join. They wouldn’t give me anything I would care for (and neither would I, proba
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I'm not sure what I can add to the comment before the previous chapter? Again, I'm welcoming all sorts of feedback. Please do not hesitate to criticize my English as well. Also, the delayed updates keep are due to studies taking over my available time. I'm not giving it up, just... slowing the story down (even more than the previous pace, I mean). There's also that chapter a few pages ahead that I'm struggling to write down, but hopefully I'll manage it sometime soon. Anyway, time for Chapter 18. Chapter 18: Freezer Logic Six minutes la
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All my sympathy for how stupid somebody must have felt when noticing that kind of error. From my very limited experience, these are the worst errors to happen in a program, as they won't keep it from functioning but it may yield unpredictable results... I am also surprised at saying that the AI was better than you: I understood you worked quite a lot on it, how can your program beat you? Has the singularity happened? Has the Reborn AI become sentient? Or maybe you can't keep up with all the calculations/checks it does, and/or you don't access all the information it knows?
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This probably sounds a little bit whiny, but I still have little idea if the story remains read. The view counter suggests so, but I learnt lately that a large part of the web traffic was made with bots, so maybe it's artificial. And the views don't translate into feedback. I suppose I can't really blame anyone, I'm not really the talkative one myself (except in the chapters, but it doesn't really count, does it ?). As a consequence, I have very little idea what would be good to change or to improve. Whether, say, making Gabriel use math to gain access to the OTS, was a good idea
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Well, sorry for the delay. Studies have a way of interfering with fan-fiction writing and proof-writing. Oh, and I suppose that they also give stupid chapter ideas. That concept was among the first I worked out for my mildly alternate story, but I still feel like it was a stupid idea. The math speech (not very long, anyway) can be skipped. Or, if you like math enough, you could try and solve the problem (or find where it comes from). I'm not too sure what sort of award I can give for that, but I'll try to think of one if the situation arises.
