Garnet.

holy heckin wadoodle boozles, i mean, you look good, haha

I'd love to! You should DM me with the details. :]

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^ LMAO anyway heres me

(that's ms.absolute zero) i appreciate the criticism, trust me. i see what you mean when you say there's no rising action though. i got you next time tho Thank you :]

I see what you mean, but that's basically all I had in mind. Just the confrontation. I didn't really need a beginning or end, mainly because, well, there isn't one... yet. But there was no context, I understand that much. Some guy starts talking and... that's it that's how the story starts? haha no but thank you! Thank you so much!! I don't really feel like I did Fern enough justice, and my Kuro was a bit OOC, but I was also thinking that it was in character for him to be out of character, if that makes sense. He's supposed to be like really lazy and not care about anything really, and he rarely ever does his job, so for him to be riled up about this, which has no relevance was supposed to be weird (until you read the end, of course) And, yeah, I figured she wasn't directly responsible for killing her friend. Isn't it ironic that she let emotions cloud her head to become emotionless? There might be more to that story, like who died (maybe it was that one grave in Corey's graveyard that had no relevance at the time, I'm not done with Reborn yet lmao). Also, Fern. Fern is a really sad character, for me. Like I said, I feel like they all lost the same important friend that day, but reacted differently. Fern is the type of guy to want to have a lot of friends (look at all his lackeys at Rini's gym), but I think once that person died he became really cold and mean, and eventually turned into Fern. And now, he still has lackeys, but he doesn't have anyone to really call his friend (except the player character, if you so choose to be his friend). And, thank you again! I probably will, as I'm not even done with Chrysolia, I have a lot more to write about. I do take requests, but just know, if I don't like it I'll probably say no (I don't write smut, but if it's not that I'll probably be like oh yeah i can do that)

im gonna bump this because i wrote a new one, it's at the top or here if anyone wants to write some fiction though we can put it all in the same topic here that'd be cool right

hi this is reborn youve been reincarnated welcome to the afterlife can i get you anything