I liked it a lot!! However, following the game's scenario lacks originality, which isn't what you want to express when writing your own stories. I suggest that you should definitely implement random occurrences, stuff that you'd like to happen to you on your own journey, if you pick back up on this, of course. Anyone reading who has already played the game will understand the basis of the story and won't be as into it, if you know what I mean. Honestly, I've debated writing a story about myself as a trainer going through regions, including Reborn as well. What turns me away is just the amount of writing. There's so much you'd have to include in order to make it effective, in my opinion at least, but maybe I'll try it myself soon someday. I look forward to seeing you continue this story!