Garnet. Posted March 15, 2015 Author Share Posted March 15, 2015 Would anyone be interested in a sort of retelling of Reborn from the POV of my character? It's really just the plot of reborn through a player character that got slowly moulded as I played through the game. I'd love to! You should DM me with the details. :] Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Garnet. Posted March 20, 2015 Author Share Posted March 20, 2015 I'm gonna bump this because a new Fanfic was written and not only is it really good but someone else wrote it :] Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
0 SPD Slowpoke Posted March 20, 2015 Share Posted March 20, 2015 So, uh, should I post it here or make a new thread? I'm not really sure what to do. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Garnet. Posted March 20, 2015 Author Share Posted March 20, 2015 I posted it here, but if you want to make a new thread then by all means! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
0 SPD Slowpoke Posted March 20, 2015 Share Posted March 20, 2015 I think I might make a new thread once I get a second chapter up. In the meantime, any feedback? Like I mentioned, I'm sort of worried about how much text I might have to rip off from the game and I'm wondering how to avoid that. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
0 SPD Slowpoke Posted May 27, 2015 Share Posted May 27, 2015 Been forever, but I'm somewhat done with a part 2. Any comments? http://pastebin.com/hEtDuDdC some thoughts. I'm probably going to start deviating from what happens in-game, it's pretty boring to have most of this be transcribed. The same things will be happenong, just a little differently, since this protagonist isn't as silent as in the game. I'm also going to have some Pokemon appear earlier, so I can get team bonding set up early. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
0 SPD Slowpoke Posted May 28, 2015 Share Posted May 28, 2015 Bumping, really hoping for comments before I continue. How did you find it? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TunaFishCan Posted May 31, 2015 Share Posted May 31, 2015 This is really good! I hope you continue to write this. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
0 SPD Slowpoke Posted June 2, 2015 Share Posted June 2, 2015 Thanks! Anything else? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AsteriaTheEnchantress Posted October 8, 2015 Share Posted October 8, 2015 Yes hello it is your friendly not-so-neighborhood nonbinary here and we need more Decibel Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheSilentSerenade Posted October 18, 2015 Share Posted October 18, 2015 Hi. I have read, commented upon and admired Heartbeat and Similarity. I will now read, comment upon and admire Reborn fic pt 1. How would one go about providing a link to one's fanfiction here, were that one interested in writing Reborn fanfiction? One might attempt such an undertaking. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheSilentSerenade Posted October 18, 2015 Share Posted October 18, 2015 Protonymic, I have read Reborn fic Pts 1-2. I quite like the way that you write your Pokémon battles. I admire the attention to detail that you have put into the clothing, mannerisms, personality and quirks of each character thus far (Fern, Ame, Julia, Victoria, and Cain) and I like that you haven't skimped on the details of your character's initial surroundings. The only critiscisms (constructive, not negative) that I have, thus far, are these: You had skipped quite a bit to get to the fisherman's indoor water source, and in doing so, skipped a lot of content that would have proved beneficial to the setting-up of your character, Alfred, via the simple act of having Alfred familiarise himself with his new surroundings in Reborn region. I have noticed that Espurr had not been recalled into its Poke ball after its turn in battle, and also, I don't believe that Snivy can glide. Lastly, there was no mention made of the place that you had received Espurr from, nor any mention of the process that Alfred had to go through to gain access to Espurr's location. Pachirisu's location was briefly touched upon. Nevertheless, I look forward to reading more Reborn fic and I believe that you are doing a great job. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
0 SPD Slowpoke Posted December 12, 2015 Share Posted December 12, 2015 Thanks a lot, though I don't think I'll continue anytime soon. I didn't intend to spend a lot of time detailing how throwaway members of the team would be caught. I tried sticking to situations that would contribute the most to showing his personality. By glide, I mean like how snakes do on the ground, pretty sure Snivy can do it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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