Red'sCharizard
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Charizard, Why did you knock yourself out...?
Long story short, I needed a more passive way to interact with the RP.
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Thomas tried his best to focus on his hearing, when, at last, he heard the voice of someone who spoke reasonably. He did not know who the voice belonged to, but would try to follow it. He tried to get through the crowd that was now hectic and loud, but could not do so and ended up falling over, hitting his head on a table. His vision turned cloudy and could barely keep his consciousness up, but did his best to nonetheless.
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I'll need to know: What is meta-ing?
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Thomas heard the crowd and its enthusiasm for rebelion.
Everybody's in favor of a rebelion... perhaps... is this what the white-cloaked man wanted? Chaos? Violence? If so, then they're achieving that task greatly... I'm greatly in opposition to this, but I won't be listened to by this crowd, the mood is against it, and greatly. I need to look through this crowd for someone who shares my opinion, and knows how to treat it rationally...
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Awesome! Hopping on now!
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Thomas could no longer keep his silence.
This is a trustworthy group of people... all of them are willing to do something about the inequality between gifted and others, and the doubt between the population...
He got up from the bench and walked over to the group.
"Hello. I have heard a good bit of your conversation. My name is... Far. That's what you should call me. I have kept myself hidden for the duration of this day, as I didn't want to fall to someone untrustworthy. Anyway, I like your ideals and goals, and I strive toward the same ones. Anyway, I hope we can keep what is going on somewhat confidential. We don't want any information leaked, or things may get out of hand."
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Well, it would be Pokemon. Any version on the Game Boy / DS consoles would do.
Other than that, i'd probably live in the world of Pokemon XD: Gale of Darkness.
What do you mean, that's just Pokemon again?
Anyway, if it'd be any other world, i'd probably choose to live in the world of Infamous.
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While Thomas was heading back to the Merchants Quarter, he heard rumours of what was now taking place at where he just left. He turned and set a course back. It was not a long walk, considering he stopped to buy some food on the way to the quarter. When hearing these rumours, he quickly finished his bread and made his way back. Upon arrival, he noticed a group of people discussing what must have been a result of the earlier golem incident. They were around a man who seemed to be shaking. He caught a glimpse of a golden light, and as a result of his surprise, didn't hear much of what followed. He sat down on a bench and decided to observe what would happen next...
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Well, I think i'll revoke what I said on my last post, as there are still many events on day 1.
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In Pokemon Red, I beat Gary just by using Venusaur. I was only 7 years old, too...
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I'll be posting by the time the meeting at that pub is underway.
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Thomas heard the woman's remarks.
A meeting at the steelwood sword pub... who will attend and what will be discussed? I should go, if I want to get to the bottom of this. I'll have to find a way to attend the meeting in a way I won't stand out, so I can either blend in with the other members, or listen in from a hiding spot. Also, there's the chance that she is an accomplice... the second option would be the safest. My hearing ability will be useful for that, too.
He quickly left the scene and headed back for the Merchant's Quarter.
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@Charizard: Be careful when involving yourself in other player's events and interactions. The good example you did was when you looked at and described Emelia and your thoughts on her. It has no effect on either character. The bad example was hearing something in the room meant for Annie and reacting to it like it involves your PC. This one isn't a big deal, but hearing something like that should be nigh impossible in the crowded room even with hearing powers.
The crowd is a bit different as that is an event anyone can jump in and out of, but events with a player name above it shouldn't be meddled with without the consent of the host and/or the ones who it is meant for.
Alright, i'll be more careful. Thanks
I fixed my roleplay post, so there shouldn't be any interference this time. -
Thomas backed away from the crowd, deep in thought. This was an irregular event that he has never seen before.
Is there a particular reason to send the school in such disarray? And if so... why? Either way, the first step will be to find the man cloaked in white, and how he did so... he definitely did something when those flashes of light appeared, so it's most likely a trick of some sort. Either way, The Scales and The Shield will not like this.
Thomas was a school student that had sided with The Scales without hesitation. However, he had kept his identity hidden with a mask when joining. His real identity was unknown to anyone this way, so he could walk around fairly freely as long as he didn't reveal much too personal information. Furthermore, because he didn't socialize, people didn't question him, which was useful. Of course, it's still too early to be careless, and he knew this.
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Anyway, I made some changes to the personality, mainly, so check out the new post
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Okay, Better from what you first had, but i'm going to pick out the flaws in this one. A lot of it is just lore-related or just makes me think of a sueish character, so it should be easily fixed.
First, the green: Thats all fine, but don't limit yourself so much. The idea behind this RP is that people select their own Gift that they use with creativity to overcome their obstacles. Lethality has to have a limit, as commander stated, but it isn't out of bounds, so long as you don't guarantee a kill.. You don't have to get rid of it all, but those parameters may as well be omitted. For examples, look at the other Gifted notes, only the really abstract had a few more lines than normal.
Next, the yellow. The Shields have no say in the police department, aside from the motion they put forth recently to allow Gifted into the force. Maybe you meant the Scales though, they definitely align with your Justice theme more.
Now for the Orange. These highlighted areas are examples of What I expect from a Sue character. There's a topic on the RP section that explains what these are. First, he is strategic and rational when calm, but is easily influenced by his anger? That's an immediate juxtaposition that I myself made when I made my first RP character. It just doesn't work together and from what I've seen is a very common convention of a sue. Next, his Vigilantism. This isn't something that would be possible, especially with the police force knowing and able to counter Gifted as needed due to having info on every single Gifteds powers. And if it hasn't been said before hand, the reigning crime syndicate has access to these records. This can't work, or he'd be dead very early in his career.
Now we move to Red. Simply put, this is Suism in the way that this Character was Singled out in some way or another, becoming a chosen one. I'm not going to lie, kinda annoyed about this flaw, as I've made it clear in my writings that the Gifted are not liked, and would not be treated this way. It makes me think you just made this character out of the blue and moulded the world to fit him, rather than the other way around. Regardless, I'm going to put it behind us and move on: But this needs to be fixed. No Pistols. Metal is rare, and Gunpowder just as much. I did state the Tech level was quite simple before much tech could be developed, or in this case salvaged, However, I did not specify any thing bout guns, so I'll let you off with that one. Finally, he couldn't have applied to the shields before the events of the story, it was a dream until the time the RP takes place in.
Overall, it's not an ideal character, but if this is your first RP, then this is a good first try. (I was much worse myself). But he still needs some work before being ready for deployment. Capiche?
I'll keep trying, and I do admit I contradict myself a lot in the post. And yes, it is indeed my first try.
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I'm not Dobby, but I'm sure the thing in red is not okay at all. You can say you side with a party, but I really doubt it'd make sense to be a full member (especially how the RP is starting out.
The markings in yellow are kind of cautions as that leaves little room for growth and improvement. Perfect characters or ones who start at their peak are hard to keep interesting over a long period of time.
The markings I wrote in blue are things that just aren't clear enough. Maybe he's a thief who had to learn to move so quickly. Maybe he steal food just so that he doesn't starve and uses his powers to help with this. I'm only saying thief because most of what you described would work well with that type of person. (speed, has to have a bit of intelligence/high knowledge of the area or would've been caught by the cops a long time ago, etc).
The only other thing I seem to have skipped over is that your PC has the ability to murder characters using his power. That's a no-no because of how OP it'd be in one-on-ones. These are more suggestions as Dobby has all and the final say in any application in the RP.
You make some good points, i'll fine-tune it. Thanks for the tip
Also, he can't be a thief, since that would go against his sense of justice. Just to point that out.
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Name: Thomas FarlandGender: MaleAge: 27Race: CaucasianAppearance: 1.84 meters (or about 6 ft, if prefered), black hair, brown eyes, has a somewhat hunched back when standingPersonality: Has a very strong sense of justice, sees only "good" and "bad people" and doesn't divide humans into any other categories. A calm thinker who tends to analyse all possible outcomes before making actions. Doesn't express emotion very often and is a bit of an introvert.Gift: The ability to manipulate sound waves. He is able to create a space where sound can be manipulated in many ways.One of them is being able to create a high-pitched tone in a small space that can leave the target dizzy and tired, thus allowing him to get close somewhat easily. The space is only about enough for 1 person to hear, and the tone lasts for about 10 seconds.Another is the ability to simulate the voice of someone they know, in order to trick an unsuspecting target, thus allowing manipulation. However, if used for more than 9 words, the rest becomes difficult to discern and cuts off, thus not being usable for long messages. Cannot be used on the same person if that person has been affected by that ability in the last 24 hours.His own hearing sense is powerful, and can hear even the slightest movements, breaths and other sounds, which can help him in many situations. He develops this ability at the age of 25.Finally, the last is emitting a powerful blast of sound that can deal significant damage to the target. This leaves them weakened and gives Thomas a good opportunity to strike. Furthermore, this ability can shatter certain solid objects.Backstory: At the age of 4, Thomas' mother was killed by an unknown criminal. He was raised by his father, who worked as a police officer. Because of his father catching criminals, his sense of justice developed at the age of 5. He dreamed of influencing justice throughout the city, and turning it into a better place. This idealology made him some enemies. There were rare times when he was scared or angry, and would emit a blast of sound when under these emotions, which he always kept inside him until he couldn't take it. However, this mysterious power didn't frighten him, it made him happy. It meant he could serve justice more efficiently.In his teenage years, he did independent research into crime in the city. He never published it, because he knew that he would then be easily targetable, and would probably be killed. He kept the research to himself, so that he could learn the patterns of the unjust and wrongdoers. He also chose to train himself to use long-ranged weapons, and has decent accuracy when throwing items, such as knives, and is capable of using the crossbow. He didn't want to rely on his powers too much, as he wasn't able to use them very well yet.At the age of 19, he got a somewhat good idea of what he could do, but was not any closer to gaining good control over his powers. He began to look up to The Scales, the goverment party that influenced law throughout the city. At the age of 27, his story begins...Additional Details: Very agile, can climb simple buildings and objects, and is capable of running fast. He learned this during his endeavors in elementary school against the bullies. Also has a strategic mind, but on rare occasions he overthinks certain situations, thus throwing himself into loops or doing something illogical. Also, he has low physical strength, and is not good with hand-to-hand combat. Because of this, he got his preference of long ranged weapons, and is able to use them effectively. He only enters close combat if absolutely necessary.
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I greatly support this, since I play on Showdown. It's a great simulator with few issues, so there should be no issues.
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Today I learned that Berlin is celebrating the 25th anniversary of the fall of the Wall.
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There's always that one driver...
You have my condolences.
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Watch the new legendary be a Mega Rayquaza.
Calling it, guys.
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Welcome to reborn! Now, please walk to the sanity-loss chamber, as we cannot afford to have any sanity in the realm of reborn.
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Still waiting for that Skarmory.
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If that's the case, I'm not gonna use that anymore, but we'll see how it goes from here anyhow.
By passive, I mean that my character is not the type to seek out attention by himself (which I was too late to realize by my last post on day 1 of the RP), so I attempted to interact with it a different way.