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    Writing 101: The Importance of Feedback and Criticism

    in Creative Works

    Posted

    1 minute ago, Commander said:

    Well I don't know if it counts as necroposting but who honestly cares at this point. So I'll just give you a reality check that all authors strive to reach a skill level called "there" for now. Without looking at anything you haven't reached that point yet. Because of that, getting to "there" is a brutal task in and of itself.

     

    It is a hit harder because the big fish (not sure if I count) are not doing any activity here to bring in traffic. I'd love to do it but there is just too much on my plate. It unfortunately is because of that no real trend can start up. You need a lot of patience and reaching out to people for advice like you're doing here. I had to basically beg people to play the mod I was working on and then it eventually picked up traction months afterwards. That's because I was getting better which attracts more interest.

     

    Seems like you're troubled by something. I know you're not alone on this so I can do a lecture type thing to help noobs out or I can look at it individually and give you advice on where to go from now. I'm not going to be able to give you instant results. It doesn't work like that.

     

    Now if you want me to look at whatever you are working on, shoot me a PM giving some details. Don't just say I need feedback because you know more about the work than I do. How do you want me to help you? I know you want discussion but what kind of discussion as there's a number of ways to answer that. 

     

    Damn, I hadn't noticed the last post's date. Sorry about that.

     

    Besides, thank you for the reply. I'm going to follow this up in PM, like you suggested.

    Writing 101: The Importance of Feedback and Criticism

    in Creative Works

    Posted

    Tell me about how silence kills self-esteem.

     

    Seriously, I haven't had anyone tell me any constructive thing about my story since weeks, when I posted the first chapters, despite my fic having a decent flow of visitors and views.

    Urgh, and now I'm asking a few people for a bit of opinion sharing and I feel like an insecure mess of an attention whore.

     

    Do you have any advice on how to personnally deal with this as an author?

    Pokémon Reborn: the novelization

    in Creative Works

    Posted

    Update: Chapter 18 is out!

    Lucia: The Coral Ward

     

    If you're reading this, or the new chapters while you're at it, and you have any kind of constructive feedback to give, then please tell me. It's been weeks without someone telling me anything and I am beginning to worry that my quality of writing is dropping.

    Pokémon Reborn: the novelization

    in Creative Works

    Posted

    Update: Chapter 17 is now out!

     

    Alice and Decibel: Striking Back

    Stuff continues to go down at Jasper, now that the trainers are trying to find what is causing these plants to attack everyone who played the game would know, but whatever.

     

    I have tried to include some further characterisation for both main characters here, I hope it feels natural.

    Once again, feedback is extremely scarce, so any you can give would be welcome.

    Pokémon Reborn: the novelization

    in Creative Works

    Posted

    Update: Chapter 16 is out!

     

    Vero and Lucia: The slums (part 3)

     

    I know I've said it before, but there may be more time between updates in the future, but never more than a week.

    And also, like before, don't hesitate to give feedback! Constructive criticism and general appreciation are both good to recieve and help me in honing my writing skills.

    Pokémon Reborn: the novelization

    in Creative Works

    Posted

    Update, Chapter 14 is out!

    Vero and Lucia: The slums (part 2)

     

    So, I originally intended to post it yesterday, but I've somehow become sick in the middle of the summer. Because of this, I am also unsure that the second half of the chapter actually has the same quality as the first. If you remark a drop, please let me know.

    Lin, Arceus, and Destiny's End

    in Reborn City

    Posted

    23 minutes ago, Waynolt said:

    So, Arceus is essentially born as a stable time loop?
    Actually makes sense... 😀

    About the timeline where the protagonist doesn't exist: I'd like to point out that Anna says that Lin doesn't exist, but also that the protagonist glows.
    I'd also like to point out that, being the player character, the protagonist can reset time itself (F12) and even stop/resume it at will (simply by closing or launching the game). (Debug mode and RPGMaker might also be worth mentioning here...)
    And that the protagonist is more of a spectator, with very little dialogue or initiative, and mostly just doing what someone else said.
    And that Lin said the protagonist is working together with her (she might have been lying, but why would she seeing how powerful she is? Is she even known to have ever lied before or after that?)

    So... if this is the final timeline, the one where Arceus is finally awakened... what if the protagonist is actually part of its being?
    Maybe Lin is the will of Arceus, with no actual form; and the protagonist is the actual form of Arceus, with no will of its own. Yet.

    Basically, we would be a more powerful version of Undertale's protag?

     

    Also, I'm pretty sure someone must have said it already, but I have never seen such a cute Drapion before!

    Lin, Arceus, and Destiny's End

    in Reborn City

    Posted

    I must say, this was a very interesting theory. That the plot armor would actually have an explication is intriguing to me.

     

    There was a sidequest, however, that I recall. It ended with obtaining a crystal ball and having an old fortune teller tell us the story of an alternate Reborn, seemingly without the Protagonist. In it, Fern seemed to take our place, and this reality apparently ended in its total destruction. Where would that fit?

     

    Finally, small nitpick; there is an abandonned PULSE machine under the wasteland, in the same room as a shiny, speaking Garbador. It is heavily implied that this Pokémon is the origin of all the waste.

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    Pokémon Reborn: the novelization

    in Creative Works

    Posted

    38 minutes ago, Cadmium48 said:

    I really enjoy this fic! Decibel is the best.

    How did you decide on what genders to make Ari and Decibel, given that they're the non-binary options?

    That, my friend, is an excellent question!

     

    For Decibel, I will keep referring to them with non-gendered pronouns. Part of their character is the mystery they have around them, and keeping their gender a secret will add to that.

     

    As for Ari, I made something a bit different. I do not intend on directly stating it, but I have let some hints in the story that she represents a different branch of the LGBTQ+ than Decibel. I felt that it would be better to make the two different in this regard.

    Badge names?

    in Reborn City

    Posted

    Hello everyone, could someone remind me of the names of the currently obtainable badges? I don't want to do a full playthrough just for it.

     

    @Gabriel1

    Julia = Volt Badge 

    Florinia = Canopy

    Shelly = Cocoon

    Shade = Omen 

    Aya = Venom or Blight (forget which)

    Serra = Rime

    Noel = Standard 

    Radomus = Millennium

    Luna = Eclipse

    Samson = Fury

    Charlotte = Cinder

    Terra = Gravity

    Ciel = Suspension 

    Adrienn = Amaranth

    Titania = Alloy

    Amaria = Torrent

    Hardy = Geode

    Saphira = Treasure

    Pokémon Reborn: the novelization

    in Creative Works

    Posted

    47 minutes ago, Shiny_umbreonDestiny said:

    He dude this is just a little nitpick on the title but Novelization has a Z not an S.

    I have just checked, both with 's' and 'z' are acceptable, but the z is more often used. I will change it, thanks for bringing it to my attention!

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    Pokémon Reborn: the novelization

    in Creative Works

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    Alright, around a week ago, I have posted here about how I wanted to make a Reborn fic, and I have decided to push it a bit further. Up until now, I have completed 6 chapters and I'm on the way to complete the seventh, although I will only publish the chapters weekly or bi-weekly. So, here it is, my very first fic: 

     

    https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13328342/1/Pokémon-Reborn-the-novelisation

     

    Just like before, since this is my first publicly published story, I would love it if you could give me some feedback about how my writing has made your day, or how it sucks, or how I could make it better. If a member of the staff sees this, I would very much appreciate your opinion on my handling of the wonderful world and characters that you have created.

     

    If you end up reading this post, then I wish you a good day.

     

    Edit: If you want to get updates regarding the advancement of the story, then you can follow this thread, I'll post updates when I post chapters.

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