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Waiting for the Goomy event to be as complicated as the Beldum event...
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Is the item helpful in anyway?
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While the idea of playing Reborn on IOS is intriguing, I doubt it will happen, seeing as how there hasn't been an official Pokemon game on IOS. (By official, I mean B&W, X&Y, ect:),
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Ok, my guess on who's going to die is guaranteed to blow everyone minds!!!!
Ready...?
Bennett.
Why you ask? Well it's been a while since we last saw him, and he may want to challenge the player again, in order to look good in front of Luna. However he fails, gets attacked by El, and realizes that he was never going to get the position as an Elite Four member.
Granted, it's a dumb theory, but you can't rule it out as of now.
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All deaths have a place in the story; depending on motivation issues and such I may or may not get around to actually writing it. However, the storyboard is already established. Worry not; there is no such thing as a pointless death in Another Journey.
I defs should have chosen another name for my male protagonist; When this first started it was just a random ass story so I just used my name. Alice and the rest of the backstory came later. I absolutely hate writing about weak characters so all of my protagonists are gonna be broken af at full power so sorry
)))Alice is a badass. She'll have her moment soon. Eventually she'll surpass everyone, including but not limited to Seehan. Again, I might not make it that far though.
Fern is a piece of shit. Hate him. Basically using him to illicit hatred.
Pokemon is of Japanese origin. Kiminikimete sounds a lot better than "I choose youuuuu"
Gardevoir is Fairy/Psychic~
Again, all story elements have their place. Patience, young Padawan~ Foreshadowing and plot elements are effective because you forget about them because they show up so early.
How often does your player character lose? And don't worry. Both Seehan and Alice are about to get fucked up within the next two Parts. Don't worry about never losing :^)
I honestly didn't expect you to respond to my comment. I applaud the level of chivalry that you showed here. Will be looking forwards to the next two parts.
P.S: My player loses around 1-2 per gym battle, but i expect that number to rise as the game goes on.
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I agree. Valid points, but the problems he points out are certainly not fatal to the story, atleast not yet. If these problems are things Seehan hasn't really considered up til now, it's still very possible to gradually change things in the upcoming parts.
As for the part about darkness, I don't think it is bad at all. Canon games logic is that everyone's skin is made of diamond, regardless of what species, with no permanent effects from fights. For a story, I don't think that would work as well.
You raise a good point there; however, as I've stated, darkness is alright, if there is only small doses of it. I personally feel that this story has too much darkness. An example, what was the point of stating that Kris and Lyra died in a Pokemon attack?
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It's only the first chapter, and already, I can't wait for more. Having Growlithe be his first Pokemon is quite interesting, though I do wonder if Ash will get a Pikachu, somewhere down the line.
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Hmmm…I hate to come across as offensive or anything, but this story has some major problems with it.
Firstly, the oversaturation of ‘Dark’ elements in the story. Now, I understand that Reborn is a dark game, and for that, I appreciate it. But, another thing about it, is that it doesn’t oversaturate darkness, like Rejuvenation does. This story is like the latter; for starters, you’ve gotten Kris and Lyra killed off in a random Tyranitar attack. What does this add to the story? Nothing. Adding to the oversaturation of darkness is the fact that you put in a lot of deaths in the story. Now, I know that people died in Reborn, but the game doesn’t go overboard on it. In the Sinnoh flashback alone, you’ve had Barry’s Luxray, Dawn, Cyrus and his Pokémon, and hundreds of Sinnoh citizens die. To me, darkness is like salt. A bit makes the dish tastier; too much ruins it. And this story is in the latter…
Secondly, the characters of the story. You have the author-insert Seehan, who could go down as one of the most unlikable protagonists in a Pokémon fanfic. From the get go, you have him as an arrogant person, who looks down on those weaker than him. From my perspective, Seehan is also a coward. Why do I say this? Seehan is gifted with special powers that makes battles ridiculously easy, to the point where the battles are pointless, seeing as how Seehan doesn’t lose. Seehan is also an unrealistic character; he goes through entire regions within the span of a few months. An example of this is after the Sinnoh flashback, where Alice comes to the realisation that he completed the Sinnoh, Unova and Kalos league in a year.
Speaking of Alice, she has been reduced to a fangirl, who constantly depends on Seehan, to the point where it can put off female viewers. You also seem to have a fascination of having Alice go through a lot of misery. Throughout the story, she has had her Swablu brutally murdered, get sexually harassed twice by Fern, nearly gets eaten by a Seismitoad, costing her the full potential of her special powers, and nearly getting beheaded by a Scyther. She then gets reduced to a shallow love interest, a staple for Pokémon self-insertion fics. And then there is Fern…
My God, what had happened to the guy? In the base game, he was highly arrogant and talked trash to the player, but at least he had some charm. Here, he gets reduced to a clown, who is there, only to further empower Seehan, by getting demolished ridiculously easy. Seeing Fern suffer this much derailment is rather painful to see, and it only adds to the poor writing of the story.
This story has a lot of pointless elements in it to. What does randomly dropping Japanese phrases (kiminikimete, Daijobu, Mizu no Hadou etc.) add to the story? How about that folder that Seehan picked up in the Peridot factory? Does it ever get brought up again? How did Seehan gain his special abilities? This story leaves the viewers with more questions than answers, which is a sign of laziness. Adding to the problem is the authors lack of research. For instance, Alice receives a Pichu with the move, Icicle Crash. A quick search on Bulbapedia shows that Pichu cannot learn the move at all. Another part is where Seehan’s Gardevoir uses its mental energy on an Umbreon. Assuming that it was using a Psychic type attack, Umbreon shouldn’t have been affected, seeing as how it’s a Dark type Pokémon.
Which bring me to my last point. I find the story quite unappealing. The outcome for the battles are always going to have Seehan/Alice come out on top. Speaking of the battles, I’ve noticed a lack of consistency in a couple of them. Pokémon that have withstood multiple attacks in one battle, get knocked out in one hit, in another battle. I understand if you want to build up suspense, but seeing powerful Pokémon getting knocked out in one hit is quite nonsensical.
I really wanted to like this story, as a story based off of a Pokémon fangame has some potential. But this story is filled with an oversaturation of darkness, characters that, if they aren’t over exaggerated versions of themselves, are plain unlikable, and is filled with inconsistent battles.
Peace out.
Do you Feel Reborn is too "Edgy?"
in Reborn City
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Me personally, I find Reborn to be the right type of dark. It manages to create a mature view on the Pokemon universe, without going too far and have people die left and right.
I would like to bring up the underlying optimism of the story, but several posts have already said that so I'll leave it at that.
Insurgence? I've played that game and I don't consider it painfully edgy. Snakewood is so painfully edgy, I almost bled to death while playing it.