Jump to content
Sign in to follow this  
Nhadala

My first ever written story!

Recommended Posts

Hi, im Nhadala and this is my first ever written story!

 

Its a story about a girl named Haruka!

 

This story is the build-up for the main part which may or may not come depending on what kind of mood i am.

 

But id appreciate any and all feedback, criticism and thoughts from other users! :)

 

But be warned that this story is dark.

 

http://pastebin.com/0Qt1fkyr

Edited by Nhadala

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
5 hours ago, Nhadala said:

Hi, im Nhadala and this is my first ever written story!

 

Its a story about a girl named Haruka!

 

This story is the build-up for the main part which may or may not come depending on what kind of mood i am.

 

But id appreciate any and all feedback, criticism and thoughts from other users! :)

 

But be warned that this story is dark.

 

http://pastebin.com/Xm4y5bqS

please i need more that was to good and reminds me of one of my fave animes overall i give it a 100/100 great work 

Edited by Sapphire Mahala

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Edited the OP with what i believe are some corrections to, well, most things in the story!

 

Ive had feedback from some of my friends. :)

 

Thanks Sapphire for the positive words! :)

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Join the conversation

You can post now and register later. If you have an account, sign in now to post with your account.

Guest
Reply to this topic...

×   Pasted as rich text.   Paste as plain text instead

  Only 75 emoji are allowed.

×   Your link has been automatically embedded.   Display as a link instead

×   Your previous content has been restored.   Clear editor

×   You cannot paste images directly. Upload or insert images from URL.

Sign in to follow this  

×
×
  • Create New...