[Discussion/Feedback] The Goltan Region

[Marcello 436]

I just posted my CW topic, so I figured I'd post this one to go along with it. Just a few points I would like to address to anyone who ends up reading it, it's an idea I've had bouncing through my head for a while now, originally as an RP, and then in a more 'Pokemon Conquest' style, before turning into what it is now, although there may be some remnants of the past forms it has taken.

I've never really shown people anything I've written before, so I honestly have no real good judge of what level of quality it is. I mean, I have a record that keeps track of every character's team and even levels, but that'sm ostly miscellania and reference for me, so I assumed it best to not share it. I don't know really, as I've said, this isn't something I've really done before. Anyway, I hope anyone who reads it enjoys, I'll try to update as and when I can, and I would greatly appreciate any feedback anyone may have. Thanks in advance, haha!

[Flux 30]

I haven't read it yet, but I just wanted to say that you may want to break things up into more paragraphs to make smaller segments. It looks a bit intimidating and hard on the eyes the way it is now. Smaller segments makes people more likely to read through it, and it's also easier to return to your place if you take a break. (I hope that sounded constructive and not just critical, because it's just meant to be a tip.) Anyway, I'll try to give the story a read-through if I get the chance.

[Marcello 436]

Looking over it now, and in fact everything I write, it DOES get a bit blocky. Can't believe I've never noticed that. Definitely good advice, I'll break up any further sections I write, and hopefully edit this one to do so, as well, if I have time. Thanks.