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    Meet The Team!

    in The Manor

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    3 hours ago, Posty said:

    this was a hard secret to keep for so long 😅

    you did not do a very good job of it

     

    good luck continuing deso lads

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    Pokemon Reworld (on hiatus)

    in Fan-game Exposé

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    when you try to pick froakie ame suddenly materializes out of the boundaries of reborn into this game.

     

    other than that not really any bugs outside of the (unfortunately fairly common) spelling and grammar errors. id advise trying to get a native english speaker to proofread your dialogues and scripts, because theres a lot of errors in that regard.

     

    i feel like rebalancing is in order though. volcanic cave as the field in the first area isnt even close to being fair, as people that picked a grass starter are able to 1vs1 the wild geodude and maybe the roggenrola if you have some levels on it. they absolutely get destroyed by any other wild mon. its stacked so unfairly against people that have grass starters its not even funny. please put a different field here, change how volcanic field works, or bypass using a field here.

     

    also, on the note of said volcano, having drought torkoal appear in the very first area on a field that boosts fire moves seems kind of broken. same could be said for darumaka and heatmor, but especially so for torkoal.

     

    nick is fairly overleveled when you battle him, and i highly suspect he has fairly good ev investment already given the fact his exeggcute was able to outspeed my chikorita. hes kind of unfairly stacked against the player at this point of the game, and the only reason i beat him was because torkoal is completely broken beyond belief.

     

    edit: also knocking up means to get someone pregnant. i dont think thats supposed to happen here.

     

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    My fanfic + the story behind it

    in Creative Works

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    as unfortunate as it may be, if your goal is to make your fanfic appealing to all readers, its nigh impossible. every reader has their own preferences of story or storytelling, so its impossible to appease all your potential readers. but dont worry too much about getting as many people as possible to read your story. while its fun (honestly understandably so) to hear that others read and enjoy your story, dont be too disappointed if your story doesnt get as much fans as you had hoped or expected. remember that everything you write is a path to becoming a better writer, which will eventually attract more readers as well.

     

    first off, something that may sound obvious, but try to be as original as possible. for example, the backstory of "I found a hurt pokemon and nursed it back to health so it now likes me and its my starter". cool thing and all, but like half the fanfics out there use it as a starter. as great as a writer you may be, most people arent overly fond of reading something that theyve read ten times before. so try to avoid or take your own spin on the common clichés.

     

    secondly, make your story appealing to actually read. constantly having long sentences of three lines or more, grammar or spelling mistakes commonly appearing in your story and bad paragraph formatting are big red sirens to most readers. proofread everything you write (preferably have someone else proofread it as well) before publishing. it sounds basic, but its amazing how many amateur-writers dont pay attention to this.

     

    lastly, try to make a story that you made or that you are very close to. while its fun that your friend has given you a story you can use, its possible that youre not as close to the characters as your friend, the original writer, was. this may lead to more superficial and subsequently less interesting writing about the characters. this is just a nitpick on my part, though. if you feel like youre able to write it as well as your friend would, then do what you want to do.

     

    most importantly, write something you have fun writing! if you sacrifice your free time creating something that youre not actually a fan of yourself, its only a matter of time before you drop it into obscurity.

     

    thats all I can tell you, though. im only a beginning writer myself, so all my advice is rather basic. good luck!

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